Comments : A Simple Sonnet (English sonnet)

  • 7 months ago

    by Daniel

    A gorgeous, somber sonnet Ben. I do really think ‘unloose’ is a bit jarring in the final line, but it’s a very very minor gripe!

    Beautifully and thoughtfully crafted as ever Ben.

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks so much, Daniel. I always appreciate your honest feedback and I think you're right about 'unloose'.

  • 7 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A sombre read but exquisite observational prose. How often as we get older do memories seek to trouble us. Often unfounded as we become too harsh critics of our own storyline. As always an emotional write with a message of hope that there is light beyond the rain and that the truth will set you free. A great write and message. Milly x

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      You're right that we criticise ourselves too often and we end up almost weighing ourselves down. The past is best let go of more often than not.

  • 7 months ago

    by Brenda

    I liked this a lot Ben, it reminded me of a "Christmas Carol". The past will continue to haunt us always, it never goes away. How we learn to accept and deal with it is a whole different story.

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Absolutely, Brenda and coincidentally, i watched muppet Christmas Carol with the kids last night!

  • 7 months ago

    by Star

    How can a sonnet be simple? Almost ironic for me personally :)
    Let me explain myself, choosing to write a formed poem for a certain topic or in here emotions, means a part of you doesn’t see this simple. And the emotions here are complicated.
    I think it doesnt have to do with aging or anything, we all feel this once in a while.

    I maybe rambling, but I really like this :)

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I suppose 'simple' refers to the message more than anything. Don't hold on too tightly to the past or let it drag you down. I was going to call it 'A simple message' but that sounded too...simple.

      All the best, STAR

  • 7 months ago

    by Tanya Southey

    Fantastic. I so appreciate anyone who can write with such structure. It evades me.

  • 7 months ago

    by Koan

    This is brilliant Ben!
    Congrats on the win!

  • 7 months ago

    by Acoustic Odyssey

    Forgiving ourselves...forgiving those that hurt us, those that keep us tethered to the past, is definitely one of the hardest things to do. But as you've stated, once you're able to let go and "discard the chains" that load evaporates. Wonderful!

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Tanya, Alfred and OC, thank you for your thoughts and time.

  • 7 months ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Fabulous, well deserved win!

    "I'm haunted by the past and all its shades -
    They shadow me throughout the night and day -"

    A splendid use of words, the imagery is incredible.