cast off the old (senryu)

This is a strong piece Ben! I love brevity in poetry...it's always fascinating how so much can be conveyed in just few words. Simply awesome!

As soon as i read the title the first thought that came to mind is shedding old skin. This can be related to many things in general, trees (as you wrote) shed their leaves when they get cold and when the sunshines for spring they are renew. Snakes shed their skin as well. However

A keen eye will notice that this is a senryu and in that fact this poem is heavy in metaphors. As senryus deal with human emotions.

So in my mind the two key words in the poem are not something one might think. Trees represent a person in your life who is having a difficult time coping and slowly like the tree in winter (the tree is this person) they are slowly healing from a tragic event.

The wording surrounding the main plot points are well used. Because this is a poem of healing and you want to continue that emotion.

A wonderful piece Ben, very much said in such little words but makes every bit of sense, very good.

I hope you and all are safe and well, M :)

Hello Ben,
What an intelligently composed senryu and loaded to the brim with zen, the essence of this oriental form. It's as if the bark of the tree is wrapped around the reader in the wisdom of your words. Masterful!

All the very best, Tony.

This is epic. For me this meant a lot from my own perspective, it will lose all and then redress itself again ..the title says it all. I was deeply touched by this senryu, it honestly speaks volumes with little words. I wish it was mine.