Fantastic senryu! The purpose and determination felt in this, the connection to nature and extension to all on earth, was inspiring. "re-dressing" made me think of "re-inventing", but in a subtle way. Keeping one's dignity and uniqueness, yet altering certain things, working on one's character in a way to further growth. To not stray from who they really are, only draw closer and understand their direction in new ways, if that makes sense.
This is epic. For me this meant a lot from my own perspective, it will lose all and then redress itself again ..the title says it all. I was deeply touched by this senryu, it honestly speaks volumes with little words. I wish it was mine.
Thank you so much, Rania. I'M glad people can relate.
6 months ago
by Tony Grannell
What an intelligently composed senryu and loaded to the brim with zen, the essence of this oriental form. It's as if the bark of the tree is wrapped around the reader in the wisdom of your words. Masterful!
As soon as i read the title the first thought that came to mind is shedding old skin. This can be related to many things in general, trees (as you wrote) shed their leaves when they get cold and when the sunshines for spring they are renew. Snakes shed their skin as well. However
A keen eye will notice that this is a senryu and in that fact this poem is heavy in metaphors. As senryus deal with human emotions.
So in my mind the two key words in the poem are not something one might think. Trees represent a person in your life who is having a difficult time coping and slowly like the tree in winter (the tree is this person) they are slowly healing from a tragic event.
The wording surrounding the main plot points are well used. Because this is a poem of healing and you want to continue that emotion.