When Water Freezes, Hearts Will Melt

by Ben Pickard   Oct 21, 2020


As I make this journey home,
Of you I do implore:
Never think yourself alone,
'midst every cloud, I soar.

On snowflakes and in drops of rain,
My eyes still live and shine;
On every golden barley grain,
The nourishment is mine.

And when the candle's flame retreats,
And when the darkness falls,
Through the ether we will meet
And break these ghostly walls.

If water freezes, hearts will melt
And yearn to be as one.
I now find life in what death dealt
And thrive beneath the sun.

--

Ben Pickard

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  • 4 weeks ago

    by Emi

    Hi Ben, congratulations on your win. Apologies I haven't been around but I've been busy studying and I haven't been very well at all in all honesty but I won't bore you. I hope you and your family are well.

    The title was very interesting in that one thing (the water freezing) would lead to the other (hearts melting) and I must say if your poetry wasn't one of my favourites I'd have definitely clicked on this just because the title fascinated me and I'd have had to read on.

    I like the opening stanza as it makes me believe that although this person is possibly having doubts you'll do anything to make sure that they believe in themselves, no matter what and that's the lovely thing about you because that the person you come across as. A genuine family man and unfortunately, in this day and age there's not many of those about.

    I like this stanza because it says to me that no matter what, come rain or shine you'll count your blessings even in the bad times because those times are the ones that truly show us our real strengths in my opinion anyway.

    This is little bit sad and says that through thick and thin even in the afterlife you'll stay together. Maybe? Just my interpretation. This stanza does have a little eerie feel about it.

    Brilliant ending of a poem about, of what I take from it, counting blessings in our lives.

    Take care and all the best to you and yours.

    Em x

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Nice one Dad.

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Congratulations Ben, a nicely rhymed piece M

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations - a well deserved win.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ben,

    I do hope you are well. It''s been too long.

    Your poem is music, but this cadence is nothing without emotional content. We live with loss, allowing the pain in. Is it not the pain that allows us to not forget? To forget is to somehow erase the time you shared.

    Ben, a lovely formed poem - a pleasure from end to end.

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Michael. Nice to hear from you.

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