Comments : When Water Freezes, Hearts Will Melt

  • 1 month ago

    by Star

    This is really beautiful!!

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you both for reading and your comments.

  • 1 month ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I cannot get over how effortlessly this reads. I think that's what I love the most, as it goes with the whole idea of the poem too. There is no hesitation, no disruption in this love. I also love the spirit of this piece, the closure you have found, reconciling with death, and reminding your love that you are in everything. Every particle, every raindrop. And you'll be able to cross the distance and be more than simply a ghost, you'll be a constant reminder of your love shared. Love is not limited to the physical side.

    I thought of death obviously in the literal sense, but also, in times of doubt. In death of character, of hope. If this person loses themselves and can't seem to feel your love, you'll be an omniscient presence.

    The title felt a little campy, but in a good way. Not necessarily cliche, just cute. When it's below freezing outside, your love will keep you warm. Or when it's cold in all meanings of the word, cold in the world, etc.

    Lovely, Ben!

  • 1 month ago

    by Lost star

    This is a like a standard, just brilliant! I love it all but the last stanza was the perfect last breath. Wonderfully written!

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, LS. A lovely comment.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ben,

    I do hope you are well. It''s been too long.

    Your poem is music, but this cadence is nothing without emotional content. We live with loss, allowing the pain in. Is it not the pain that allows us to not forget? To forget is to somehow erase the time you shared.

    Ben, a lovely formed poem - a pleasure from end to end.

    • 4 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Michael. Nice to hear from you.

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations - a well deserved win.

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Congratulations Ben, a nicely rhymed piece M

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Nice one Dad.

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Emi

    Hi Ben, congratulations on your win. Apologies I haven't been around but I've been busy studying and I haven't been very well at all in all honesty but I won't bore you. I hope you and your family are well.

    The title was very interesting in that one thing (the water freezing) would lead to the other (hearts melting) and I must say if your poetry wasn't one of my favourites I'd have definitely clicked on this just because the title fascinated me and I'd have had to read on.

    I like the opening stanza as it makes me believe that although this person is possibly having doubts you'll do anything to make sure that they believe in themselves, no matter what and that's the lovely thing about you because that the person you come across as. A genuine family man and unfortunately, in this day and age there's not many of those about.

    I like this stanza because it says to me that no matter what, come rain or shine you'll count your blessings even in the bad times because those times are the ones that truly show us our real strengths in my opinion anyway.

    This is little bit sad and says that through thick and thin even in the afterlife you'll stay together. Maybe? Just my interpretation. This stanza does have a little eerie feel about it.

    Brilliant ending of a poem about, of what I take from it, counting blessings in our lives.

    Take care and all the best to you and yours.

    Em x