Comments : Turn Around if Possible (senyru)

  • 1 month ago

    by Star

    Lol, are you sure its better with a map though?
    Well written, welcome again :)

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      At least they don't speak back!

      Thank you very much !

  • 1 month ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Your first post to the site and I couldn't be prouder! The title ties in beautifully and comically to the main body and so it is used as a 'sneaky fourth line' as Mr Darcy (Michael) told me when teaching me about these forms.
    Perhaps this is more one of Larry's syntuits as we spoke about because of words like 'I' but otherwise, this is wonderful.

    Love Dad

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      thank you! you're right , it is more of a syntuit!

  • 1 month ago

    by Emi

    Hi Keira and welcome.

    The title works extremely well as a fourth line and this is an excellent senyru/syntuit especially for your age and first post. I look forward to reading more of your work.

    Em x

  • 1 month ago

    by Maple Tree

    Hello Keira,

    This poem reminds me of the true journey in life, which road to take. How nice it would be if we had a map.. However some of those roads, you may think your lost, but it leads you right where you need to be. I love this format, you have talent my sweet, so happy to have you here with us!

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      You're right. But sometimes life is just about taking a chance - without maps, unfortunately! Thank you so much!

  • 1 month ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I relate to this so much! My family knows I am prone to getting lost if traveling somewhere new, and I usually have to study directions days in advance. A map could come in handy too, just not to read while I'm the one in the driver's seat haha.

    But there have been many "turns not taken" in life, literally and also in paths and choices I should have made, yet didn't. It's all part of the journey though.

    Welcome to this site, again! :)

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Haha, my family and I've been in situations like that too! That's very true.
      Thank you !

  • 1 month ago

    by hiraeth

    I need a gps even to go down the street or I'll get lost! Welcome to the site! Hope to see more from you!

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Haha,You're not the only one! Thank you!

  • 1 month ago

    by Rania Moallem

    It seems like I was the only person to perceive this poem emotionally? That's the beauty of poetry I guess. What a great start <3 looking forward to reading more! Welcome. A touching poem, for me.

  • 1 month ago

    by Violet Raven

    I enjoyed this poem because it can be taken to mean a lot of different things. As most people have pointed out the face value of the poem itself is getting lost in a car on the way to a certain place. Here in the USA gps' often confuse themselves to where they get lost as well even if you know you are on the right track.

    But I also took it as an emotional piece (perhaps that is the state of mind i am in now). It feels like this person is at a cross roads deciding which way they want to go in this life. They feel like they have taken a wrong turn and feel lost.

    It's difficult to turn around once you have mafe that decision. A map would help yes but oft times you have to follow your gut feeling.

    I think the semi colon works well here punctuation wise, because you are connecting the two sentences but (and this might just be me) i don't love the comma because in my mind it flows and reads better without it.

    Anyway. Welcome to the site.

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      You're right, it can certainly be taken in two different ways. And we all do the two things: get lost in a car and come to a crossroad.
      Yes, it does work better without the comma.
      Thank you!

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    My previous Satnav was so boring, so I decided to overlay the voice with Stephen Fry's. Well worth my pocket money! Now, whether I was lost of not, I had one of my icons with me - he even said, "I think I love you?" At the end of each journey. Lol

  • 1 month ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Haha! it's not just me who thinks satnavs sound boring!
    Lol, that must have given your journeys an interesting side!

  • 4 weeks ago

    by Brenda

    I liked this a lot. You definitely could read this more than one way. Sometimes those unfamiliar roads are the best ones to travel. Never know what adventure waits around the corner.

    • 4 weeks ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Thank you! Yes, exactly, i agree. Life is all about the adventure!

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Shruti

    Somehow really reminds me of The Road Not Taken by Frost, haha!
    I guess we can look around and smell some flowers nearby when we are lost, both in life and while actually travelling through unfamiliar roads. ^-^
    Enjoyed reading it!

    • 3 weeks ago

      by Keira Pickard

      I can see that, actually, as it can be taken in a humorous way and in a sadder way. If you take it in the latter way, then it definitely has the same thoughts on paths that you didn't go down!
      Yes, enjoy what's there, I agree.
      Thank you!