Sunrise (Eintou)

by Lost star   Nov 6, 2020




Sunrise
falls upon me,
crimson skies overhead.
Prisms glisten on spider webs
as the bird's sweet song plays.
I feel alive
today.

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  • 2 months ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Not sure about this form of poetry, I can’t remember hearing of it at all so will go and do some research on it and perhaps even attempt some of my own!

    As for the poem, I feel like this would be a fantastic quote to be typed onto a product that can be in someone’s room. Like a plaque or a cushion or something to wake up to and read that’s every morning as some sort of affirmation for the day ahead.

    Lovely to read

  • 3 months ago

    by Lost star

    Thank you all so much for your comments, I'm a big fan of formed poetry often finding the restrictions a source of inspiration rather than a creative hindrance :)

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Lovely imagery Lost star. A picture of an icy crisp dawn.
    M :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Star

    I see how this poem is optimistic, but for some reason I felt sadness as well. Maybe I'm taking this way too deep, but just stating "I feel alive today", made me wonder what about yesterday and tomorrow? It's like a temporary feeling that some other day would seem a part of a dream.

    I really like it!

  • 4 months ago

    by Skyfire

    I'm not familiar with the form, but I actually really enjoy the way this looks visually as well as the simple optimism, as Mr. Darcy commented.

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