by Michael
Crumbs! Pesky mice or hungry parents! :)) |
Haha, both, maybe! Thank you. |
by Mr. Darcy
Hello, |
Haha! |
by Violet Raven
In a traditional senryu it deals with human emotions and feelings. I love this because the very first word is almost onomatopoeic and that in itself should be praised because you let the reader know right away the feeling of the author themselves, you are infuriated. Such a perfect word to use for upset or angry and it fits perfectly well into the first line. But you must keep going on the second and third line to describe what is making you mad. |
Thank you for your comment! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the suggestion on the comma, too, I'll look into it. |
by Lost star
Lol, this made me chuckle and it is completely identifiable! Great little Senryu! |
Thank you! |
by hiraeth
Nicely penned Keira! |
by Meena Krish
Nicely penned my dear I liked the image and it made me smile as I thought of Tom & Jerry! Keep penning! |
by Emi
This is excellent :) |
Thank you all so much! |
by Ben Pickard
Cheese and crackers and a nice glass of wine... |
Lovely. |
by Daniel
I wish I could blame a mouse for all the cheese disappearing in my house. Well done! A deserved win :) |
Haha, relatable! Thank you so much. |
by Mr. Darcy
congratulations - it just shows you, great things come in small packages! |
by Brenda
Well done young lady! Congratulations on your win! |
by Michael
Well done young Keira on your first win, with a clever little piece (like the cheese :) M |
Haha, Thank you all so much! |
by Everlasting
I love the title, “Oh, Crackers”. |
Thank you! |
by Maher
Lol this made me laugh! Mr Pickard has brought his secret weapon to P&Q it seems, but he's done well :) |
Haha, thank you. |
by CRAFTY KEN
Like it, obviously you are a chip off the (Excuse the Pun) old block! I burst out laughing, because of bad memories years ago when, indeed, some of our special hand picked cheeses vanished from the tray before we could savor there expensive taste! Our little Girl Kari is now a mature Mum of 44 years old with our two beautiful grandkids, Grayson, and Crosby. I wish you all the Best as your Dad would say. You have some big shoes to follow. Added your Poem to my Favorites. |
Thank you so much - That must have been irritating! :) |