Comments : I Wrote You In The Bark (English sonnet)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Emi

    All I can say is I just wish I could nominate. This is, as always, excellent work. X

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Skyfire

    Love this one! These lines are my favorite:

    "I chased you round the glades and never found
    A way to grasp your shade and make it stay"

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Skyfire. Glad you liked it.
      Take care.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    As ever, your sonnets bring quite to my mind.
    I know sonnet's deliver on many levels, not just to the reader, but the author, too. The process of writing is like self-discovery. It allows us to step outside ourselves and offers a different perspective.

    With nature falling away, we are left with another barren Winter. This feeling of loss will be relatable to many. Why is the acceptance of this the hardest of all?

    Take care.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Lost star

    Pant droppingly good... really really good! Saved to favs so I can read with artistic jealousy later.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Funny how many of yours have incited the same feelings in me!
      Thanks, LS

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    The depth and sadness of a love being breathless instead of saying "I'm breathless"... and those last two lines especially. This reminded me of how fast the seasons change, how we can hold on to a love only to see it progress and move to someone else. The correlation of nature here and extension of love, in any relationship, really made me feel this piece. The imagery of the trees, of wanting to keep one's shade and stay in it, then having to cope with what is lost to us. When we want to hold on to the warmth yet it's fleeting, and we're left with the bones of nature as winter has no mercy. And the times when we're left after having given so much to someone, only for them to return it, or leave us with the bare reminders of what could have been fulfillment. Chasing what we know we can't call ours.

    LOVE this, Ben!

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for reading, MA. Glad you liked this one so much.

  • 1 week ago

    by Daniel

    'I tried to live with you amongst the leaves,
    But now I die beneath the naked trees.'

    So simple, yet so poignantly evocative. I think it's really tough to end poems, but you always nail it. You've found a way to write honestly in formed poetry without losing any of the imagery along the way. That's difficult. I loved this.