Comments : Beautifully Formless

  • 4 months ago

    by hiraeth

    "As I search for the verse that this is to become,
    I finally realise that the flowers are dead;
    Poetry is not about words, or rainbows and sun,
    But the emotions to which we are hopelessly wed."

    I love this so much! Nominated!

  • 4 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    "Who needs meter or form?" This piece shows off how far a restricted poet can move from their place of safety. The waters are cold, but one soon becomes accustomed.

    Glad to see this nominated.

    Take care.

  • 4 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Oh how I have missed your poetry..
    Glad this is nominated..

    Not much i can say that isnt already x

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Good to hear from you, Nams. Hope you're well.

  • 4 months ago

    by Everlasting

    I feel like I have read this one before. Anyways, I agree to disagree in the sense that “poetry is not about words”. I mean, I agree with that. As you know or may be not, for me Poetry are written thoughts per se and Thoughts come in many forms (images, words, a mixture of both lol) that can be expressed via writing actual words, painting, coloring, music, hehe programming, proof writing... etc and sorry I can’t really add clarity to my sentences. But I disagree in the sense that it doesn’t just narrows down to the emotions we are hopelessly wed, it’s wider than that. It’s much more than that. However, the emotions we are hopelessly wed can be the start or the push for someone to become a poet, musician, mathematician (cause there’s poetry in math too :D).

    Sigh, I do however like this piece. And by no means I am trying to start a debate lol. Just felt like sharing the tangled thoughts that are trying to untangle as I read your poem. If you (general speaking) feel better with writing with rhymes, do it. If you prefer free verse, do it. So I’m glad to see rhymes in here.

    Thanks for sharing.

    All the best.

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I love hearing your thoughts and honesty, Lucero, so thank you. And you are perfectly clear.
      I did post this a few months back then deleted almost as quickly. Not sure why, but I thought it was no good. I read it again yesterday and realised it wasn't all that bad after all!

  • 4 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I am mesmerized by this piece. There's a freshness in this, of discovering and unpacking how you can evolve through poetry, or how poetry can evolve through you.

    The most relatable lines in my opinion:

    "Poetry is not about words, or rainbows and sun,
    But the emotions to which we are hopelessly wed."

    - There are certainly times where I feel I need that "spark" in order to say a piece is finished, like I need some over-arching theme or roundabout reflection, when, sometimes, it's just dark. Or sad. It's raw. But that should count too, emotions in their most authentic form. Your line of "hopelessly wed" speaks to me as well. Because sometimes we can't help but let emotion move us, as it should. It's not always something we can control. Poetry is far more layered than simply the weaving of words... though it can be frustrating when the words are there, just not fully formed yet, on the tip of one's tongue or at the edge of a thought!

    I think this piece can be taken many ways, more than a personal reflection of letting the shackles be loose, and adapting to that, but also being reborn, as you say, and how that can mean different things for different people. It can inspire growth. We don't have to be conformed or made to believe that our best work is only in this or that form. It's all about your path, where you find yourself, and listening to your voice. Whether that be in forms, rhymes or anything else.

    I love the introspection in this. When poetry is created, sometimes we need to let it "be", without a push or outside instigation. And that can be freeing. Other times, people may like more challenges, and more ways to direct that emotion and creativity into clever writing techniques. But there's content to be found when we can find beauty in the formless, as your title states, and let go of expectations :)

    A thought-provoking piece for sure, really enjoyed this one!

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      MA - thank you. Glad you got so much from this.

  • 4 months ago

    by Skyfire

    My favorite lines are the same as hiraeth and Poet -
    "As I search for the verse that this is to become,
    I finally realise that the flowers are dead;
    Poetry is not about words, or rainbows and sun,
    But the emotions to which we are hopelessly wed."

    This rings particularly true for me as writing is my favorite release! If I must feel it, then at least I can write something from it.

  • 4 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    This is wonderful, Dad! I loved reading it. The title works perfectly and the rhymes are smooth. Excellent.

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Skyfire and thank you, Keira

  • 4 months ago

    by Star

    I agree with MA this os thought provoking!!! This is truly beautiful though, there is so much to take from it. I’m so happy to see it nominated!

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    Amazing, as always.

    (<3)^boop!