Hello Ben, I like the innocence portrayed in the sentence of the title because I think many of today's children, unfortunately don't have the innocence we did as children and are 'older belong our years' and it makes me very sad that many of today's youth have 'lost their way' before they've even begun and in all honesty (my opinon) I feel it's down to technology.
pollution and smoke, we
gift our lungs
I love the use of the word gift in this line because we don't really have a choice but to take the pollution and smoke we are given and it's only going to get worse too.
the fields are memories
we tell our young
I felt myself nodding here as even at my age (and I'm not too old) my nephews barely go out as they'd rather sit and play on fortnite and when I'm looking after them and tell them to go and play outside, they look at me as if I've grown another 2 or 3 heads.
The imagery throughout the whole piece is astounding, as ever.
Take care and keep writing. =)
I immediately saw the title and felt a bit of "deja vu", and am happy you re-posted this. A simple rhyme, and while it's a short piece, it's devastating. I am at least thankful for those who are self-aware and care to talk about our impact on the environment, but it can feel a bit daunting to realize even if we try to make small, personal changes, there is much that I feel we can't change.