Comments : Mirage ( syntuit )

  • 1 week ago

    by Maple Tree

    Keira,

    Very pretty visual!!

  • 1 week ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I think the change from haiku to syntuit was the right decision on balance. The last line and title tie in perfectly for that 'ohhh' moment!

  • 1 week ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Like the fighter jet
    view of the desert lagoon
    it was gone too soon
    ^
    My rhyming one is ok, but your one is so much better! :)

    • 1 week ago

      by Keira Pickard

      I think you should post that :)
      Thank you!

  • 1 week ago

    by Brenda

    Keira your writing is right on par. I agree about the Synuit, it works perfectly.

  • 1 week ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautifully written. Beautiful imagery.
    Milly x

  • 1 week ago

    by Emi

    Kiera,
    This is an absolute treat to read.

    Well done.
    Em x

  • 5 days ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I meant to comment on this sooner but well done with this syntuit, and the imagery in such few words. Always look forward to more of your work!

  • 2 days ago

    by hiraeth

    An excellent syntuit.