A Change Of Weather

by Keira Pickard   Mar 1, 2021


Ice might freeze your aching heart,
Tidal waves might try to pull you apart,
Thunder will rack your happiest thoughts,
Lightening will chase you until you're caught.
Hail will dash away your hopes and dreams
And rain will fray your strongest seams.
Snow might try to weigh you down
And earthquakes will push you to the ground -
But when all seems lost and you want to run,
Behind dark clouds waits the golden sun.

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Keira Pickard 2021.

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  • 3 days ago

    by Jack

    I love this poem!

  • 1 month ago

    by cassie hughes

    I love the way this poem uses the weather to portray feelings, building up tension line by line as if a storm is approaching only to break on that final line as the sun comes out. I love it.
    Just one question though. Should it be hail not hale? To be hale is to be fit and well and I'm not sure that works in this line. Just a thought.

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Thank you! I'm full of typos and mistakes :) thank you for pointing out ' hail'.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Sorry I'm late to this. :)

    I like this poem. It speaks of resilience and hope. In a world where we have had to dig deep for the light, it's reassuring that just around the corner there's a golden sun.

    I've edited your poem below, I hope you don't mind, just a tweak here and there. Take care.

    Ice might freeze your aching heart,
    And tidal waves threaten your mast.
    Thunder will rack your happy thoughts,
    Lightening will chase until you're caught.
    Hale will dash all hopes and dreams
    And rain will fray your strongest seams.
    Snow might try to weigh you down
    earthquakes will push you to the ground -
    But when you're lost and want to run,
    Behind dark clouds waits golden sun.

    • 1 month ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Thank you! I like some of the changes :)

  • 1 month ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Thank you both so much!

  • 1 month ago

    by Everlasting

    Awesome. Love the ending. But I specially like how by reading every line, one can sense a build up of encouragement coming until at the ending line one is greeted with the “ah ha” moment. Well done.

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