Comments : Twilight (free verse)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I believe this may be the first free verse you've posted on here? It's so calming, which is how I view twilight. I felt that sense of nostalgia, as you mentioned, and that peace of mind found in nature, in the quiet moments when one is not busy with the day's tasks. I rarely see the word "indigo" in texts, and I've always found it rich and poetic, so I loved seeing that here as it brought a sort of depth to it. "freckled with faraway stars" was one of my favorite lines, and I don't really have any critiques or criticisms to strengthen this poem. The length felt perfect, and even that simple "farewell", gave me a feeling of comfort at the end of the day, knowing there will be a fresh start tomorrow, but able to contentedly watch the still lit sky.

    Curious to know if you prefer forms or free verse, or if you don't mind either? I know it can be about what feels more natural to the poet, or what they've had more practice with. This was such a nice surprise to read!

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Thank you, MA! Yes, this is my first free verse. I generally don't mind either, actually, and enjoy writing and reading both. Thank you again!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Em

    The only word I have for this is 'nominated' because you my dear have left me speechless!!
    Em x

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ben Pickard

    MA says it all here. I knew you had a free verse in the works, but I had no idea of the quality. I only say that because I know you hadn't really experimented with them. On this evidence, you should write more of them!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I'm in awe of your immense talent. Perhaps, I could preorder a signed copy of your poetry?

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Michael

    A wonderful soothing piece young Keira
    .. of a special time of the day becoming evening, images to savour.
    M :)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Everlasting

    You are talented. I enjoyed this piece a lot. Thanks for sharing with us.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Thank you so much, everyone!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Walter

    This paints such a pretty picture which you have described beautifully, where, not even a photo could capture the same awe as your words! Well done and I'm glad to see it nominated. I agree with all the previous comments and hope we see more of this type of style from you. The sky's the limit with your talent :)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Brenda

    Keira, just beautiful! Your beautifullness comes pouring out in your words. I love reading your pieces and your growth as a writer.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Jessica L.

    Beautiful! You have a way with words. I just love this.

  • 1 week ago

    by Jack

    This is GREAT and I love it so much! I am 11 and my account is The Bus Boys and I have a couple good poems.

    • 1 week ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Thank you, The Bus Boy. I look forward to reading your poems :)

  • 1 week ago

    by Em

    Congratulations on such a well deserved win xxx

  • 1 week ago

    by Everlasting

    Congratulations!

  • 1 week ago

    by Star

    When I first read this I was happy you finally posted a free verse, a very good one too :)
    Congrats Keira you deserve this!!

  • 1 week ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Belated congratulations. This is a superb piece.

  • 23 hours ago

    by ddavidd

    This is so Wonderfull dear Keiri.
    The visual are amazing. I hope you know that you are very strong in your visuals.
    I was away when you joined here. Welcome to this site, You like your father are very talented and a good asset to this place.
    I also love your avatar. Swans are my favourite.

    • 23 hours ago

      by Keira Pickard

      Thank you so much. I love swans, as well.

  • 23 hours ago

    by ddavidd

    That says a lot about you.