Comments : Full.

  • 10 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I like this style from you:
    - A fact of nature
    - A simile
    - An emotional conclusion

  • 10 months ago

    by Em

    Hi Kellie,
    The title 'full' could literally be about anything really as in being full of love, joy, self respect, happiness and peace or on the other hand it could be they you're full of anger, upset, hatred or self loathing and I guess reading on will make me understand more.

    a bumblebee
    with a full stomach
    is only ever 40 minutes
    away from starvation
    let me put it this way -
    being a bumblebee
    is a lot like loving you
    ^
    I like how you always start your pieces/stanzas with a fact usually about animals and it makes me wonder if you're a true animal lover of all animals or if you just Google things to make your pieces amazingly interesting; as they always are. That being said, I like the contrast of loving a person to that of an hungry bee as both will want for more... The human more love and the bee more food for them to thrive and survive.

    still i wouldn’t have
    traded this for
    any other moment
    or any other words
    but once you’ve put
    so much of yourself
    into something
    something should
    come in return
    ^
    Now, ain't this the truth. If you put your all into something or even half of your all you'd expect the same back, like me but, unfortunately that rarely happens which causes relationships (of any kind) to break down.

    our end came
    unannounced
    in the middle of the night
    left me realizing that
    i have been hungry
    for six months
    chasing after
    your tangerine
    dream
    ^
    This seemed as though it was a cowards way out, not sure why but just imagining the scene with you saying it came 'unannounced in the middle of the night'... Heartbreak, is never easy to comprehend, unfortunately no matter how long you've been together for that time all you wanted is them and when they're not there anymore, it sucks. Sending hugs.

    now i haven’t had
    a meal in three days
    because with the ways
    that i miss you
    i’d rather starve
    than to be so full
    of you
    ^
    This is a very sombre ending and one I could relate to some time ago. I just want to say it will get easier, time is a great healer and that I'm here of you need to talk.
    Stay safe, Em x

    • 10 months ago

      by Prophecies In Kodak

      I am an avid animal lover but this poem beginning was mostly because I have been fascinated with bees lately. The first poem where I stated facts about the whale and octopus was from a trivia night with my friends. We had an animal category and I took those facts away from it. I don’t know how I form the things I write it all just comes together jn one massive rush, but I have enjoyed starting out the poems with facts that are relatable to the heart break.

      Thank you! I’m doing much better but I love to write about the sadness no matter what it seems.

  • 10 months ago

    by Lena

    Love this so much!