Comments : I'll Take What You Can Give.

  • 13 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Aww thats really good well done and keep writing xxxx

  • 13 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Please, don't take the taste away from me..
    [[I really loved that line. It fit the poem beautifully.]]

    As always, I really liked it.
    It didn't really rhyme, but you pulled it off. The flow was still there, the story still clear, and so very sad.

    I really enjoyed this piece; I can almost hear you reading it to me on the phone. =]

    Great job. xx

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5
    Sheena

  • 13 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Please, don't take the taste away from me..
    [[I really loved that line. It fit the poem beautifully.]]

    As always, I really liked it.
    It didn't really rhyme, but you pulled it off. The flow was still there, the story still clear, and so very sad.

    I really enjoyed this piece; I can almost hear you reading it to me on the phone. =]

    Great job. xx

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5
    Sheena

  • 13 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    "And the last thing I want for you to see is a soldier crying.
    Let the melodies see you through the wars right now
    While I sport, with pride, the split lips and black eyes.
    I'm fighting the war of the ages just to hold your hand tonight
    And using the cost of comfort now as a tool for compromise."

    ^^. Classic Ian. And do know, I'm not refering to the simple text; it's the depth that I'm talking about. Though, as I say it out loud, I could also be refering to your style of poetry. Whichever comment floats your boat, then. :]].

    Overall Rating: 4.6/5