That's so good, Ian. It's actually not my favorite, but I really started liking it near the end.
How you made it seem like lust at the beginning and such a sweetness at the end was very classy.
I also loved that you said: "Oh, I'll give up the matchbox cars, trading cards, all the old records and cds." I'm not sure why. I just really liked the fact of the message; you'd give up everything to please her, maybe?
Well, that's what I got out of it.
I love your work.
"I think i might grow carpal tunnel of the wrist if I continue to satisfy the need"
^^. A very interesting line, none the less.
Huhm, you know.. the question still remains without an answer, why is it that people who care; end up falling on their face?
Don't take in account this was related to your poem, don't want to insult you. I continue to ask, and never get a straight answer.. People always say that ".. It's because the person that is getting the care.. is too selfish to give it back"..
I've also heard ".. maybe the person never cared to watch the other fall?" But what an answer that is! Throwing a guestin back in my face! ha.