Comments : People People People

  • 8 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is interestingly penned. There is an odd sort of flow even though it works and the capitalization in the third stanza are a bit distracting, especially since there are so many so close together. However, your point is clear in a very unique way and your word choices were very unique. You have a wonderful potential, but this piece is just kind of... off.

    4/5