Omg awwww. thats sooo sad, so powerful. i really liked this and its a really strong topic and you have done a great job on this, 5.5 xxx

Everything very good with this poem. Good lines and flow. Yet I feel may be one more stanza is missing. Anyway it's a very good poem!

Beautifully writen, stirring all sorts of emotions. I'm afraid I don't agree with a couple of the readers (sorry).. It doesn't need more, as the ending is left to hang, to imagine the horror that awaits. I'm not sure what else you could write, without actually ruinung the piece.. I'm one for using 50 words, where only 5 will do, but even I know how to leave the most said, simply by leaving the words unspoken. Also, being English myself, as you are, the use of no-one is literally correct. I know many other languages learn inaccurately, so please don't change it, as it will read incorrectly.

Lastly, when are you writing more?? Surely you have had enough experiences, of late (as well I know), to give you a little inspiration?? lol.. Love you lots, Katie, and your work. xx

*written
*ruining

Sorry..new laptop for Christmas, and I'm still trying to get used to the keys!! lol xx

Had me in tears.. I can relate. Really appreciate you sharing this and really appreciate your honest emotion throughout. Thank you.