I'd work on the last part so it flows better. But still, this is an excellent poem with an apt message.

Nice flow dude.

I think we should flippin nuke those terrorist fools that would definently get rid of those crap heads. good right pretty sweet action dude.

Straight n simple..yet strong! Good job!!

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I loved it!!

I gave u a three on this poem because u started out strong and ended a little on the weak side man. Always try to end a poem restating the title and maybe adding a lil sarcasm. Instead of you it should be your. Relic u started off the poem stating the title and I bet that if u end it a lil differently and restate the title once more u will get higher ratings. Thanks for the message u sent me though and I truly do appreciate but I am not a professional and I learn something new everyday because I look 2 improve. Look up different type of poetry formats and look to increase your vocabulary to add a lil more versatility and flavor to your writing . Your talented but everyone has extra room for improvement......... including me!!!!

I LOVED it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

it's a really great perspective and put across very nicely, shot!!!