Comments : How many?

  • 9 years ago

    by linkhorizon

    I envisioned the despair you conveyed through your lyrics in my head. the flow was great and easy to follow. i truly enjoyed this piece. great write. 5/5 :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Moose

    Great poem, I would definitely vote for this in the weekly contest, IF there was the slightest hint of punctuation in it.

    I'm sorry, Honestly? The poem is great, nice even flow, words rhyme well, arent forced at all. BUT not having commas, and periods, make me have to figure out the beat to the poem myself, which makes me have to read it again in turn, making the poem have a less "WOW" factor because I've already somewhat read it.

    Its not hard, a period at the end of every sentence, and a comma at when it seems right. Also a bit of spacing would probably bring up some visual points in my opinion. You're writing in the ABAB style, so its every 4 lines there's a new stanza. If you go in and add this space it brings just the basic visual appeal up a little in my opinion.

    As for poetry itself, this poem is great. Keep up the great work. I love it =p

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Leaving beautiful .....Oooo
    footprints on our ....(...... )
    hearts........................)... /
    ................................(_ _/
    oooO
    .(..... )...... and
    ...\... ( .......~ never ~
    ....\__) ......quite the same.
    somebody remembers you and wishes that you were there. somebody is praising God for you. somebody needs to know that your love is unconditional. somebody values your advice.
    somebody wants to tell you how much they care.

    Beautiful emotions sad penned you portrait here, Keep them coming! Best wishes!

  • 9 years ago

    by Skyfire

    I think this was a beautiful write that in some way everyone can relate to. I felt your loss and I feel as if i can almost understand your heartache.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ixora

    The pain is vivid in this poem you have great skill.

    [.Bow.]

  • 9 years ago

    by Countess of Monte Cristo

    Amazing.

  • 9 years ago

    by Dian PH

    WOW YOU WON HOW YOU DO THAT AMAZING!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Dian PH

    Wow im amaze by these and a challenge to make my own one too!! 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by DreamingOutLoud

    Nice work

  • 8 years ago

    by Aubrey

    Loved it.