Comments : Agoraphobia

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Jessica,

    This poem is well written, it has a good flow and rhyme to it and you chose your words well.
    The thing is with fears and obsessions that it is so hard to fight because it all happens inside your head.
    You suffer in the worst possible way and no one could ever tell....
    I have had fears too..many..I have conquered them all by looking them right in the eye. It was not easy, not at all..but I never wanted to become the kind of person that needs psychological help all her life so I faced my fears one by one. The worst one was my fear of going outside in the dark. I forced myself to go to disco's in other towns all by myself, taking the train. Every time I would be so afraid and almost running home on the way back, but I did it!
    If you really want to, you can anything, really anything. The mind is far more strong than the body;)

    Take care,

    Ingrid 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Steven Topaz

    You had told me about your disorder but I didnt think it was hurting you that increddibly bad was this the one that you told me you cried over, because it was worth the tears, its a beautiful poem, beautiful emotion, and really good beat,
    In my opinion your new best.

    That one you commented on mine i hate.. i wrote it in a panic because i was erm about to do something, ( i was talking about "here" I acutaly like that one)

  • 15 years ago

    by amber

    This is heart breaking :( do you really have this disorder? if you do i'm so sorry and i hope that you will one day over come it. Thank you for the comment on my poem "The Mighty Hand". it's nice to know that people still read my work :) this write was very well described. it kind of came across as a story about a person in prison. like they can't break away.....beautifully tormenting. Harsh words for such disorder as this but it was a beautiful write. i hope to read more :)
    Thanks again!!
    ~*~Amber~*~

  • 15 years ago

    by Wereallbladesarntwe

    Hi love, my mom went through years of this, when she was younger, but got through it, your poem says it all, hope you get through it too, xP

  • 15 years ago

    by Jessica

    Amber: you're right, agoraphobia is just like prison but with an invisible warden. but it's almost an inviting prison. because once you step outside those limits, you lose your sense of safety. you feel exposed to the world around. it's a horrible feeling. i have a combination of agoraphobia and social phobia. so i'm always feeling like someone is staring at me or judging me. i can't stand in a line at the grocery store without someone by my side (someone i trust very much) this stems from years of thinking i was never good enough. it's rooted in my head that i'll never meet the standards of a normal society. i was scared to put this poem on here, for the very reason that it is so personal. i didn't want people treating me any differently because i have this disorder. like it said, i hate to show any sign of weakness, because i'm such a fragile person in reality. i feel like someone is going to take advantage of that. but I appreciate each comment on here so much. thank you for your kind and encouraging words everyone. :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    Brilliant! Absolutly brilliant! I'm going to add you on my favorites, so you'll soon discover this, but I'm a truth teller. I don't deal in lies, and I genuinely think this piece was great! You've got such great wording, which gives you such a strength when it comes to rhymes. I loved the tone of this piece too. Sadly, I can't find a favorite stanza or line, because it's all equally good. I rarely do this, but I actually gave this piece a 5/5 rating.

    Brad

  • 14 years ago

    by Lisa

    Wow amazing use of imagery and very vivid language.its a hard topic to write about yet you pulled it off beautifully.
    great job once again!
    5/5
    take care:)

  • 14 years ago

    by StillxBreathing

    Lovelovelove this. very good