What a cute poem! The rythm of the couplets is perfect except for the first and fifth couplet. Other than that, well done. 4/5
Stefanie

It is, perhaps, a little too Daddy Mommy.
The repetition of those names in the poem I think loses some of the innocence that it's meant to hold. I'm not too sure why, but if it had less I think it'd sound more like a child.

Though you did do a good job at making it sound like a small child talking (or writing?).
And the idea of this is sweet. :)

4/5

jess ~

Very nice, 5/5, very touching.

-mandy :)

Awww such a cute poem, very interesting way of writing, simply amazing

Wow. you made me want to go to the snow with my family, although i have never seen nor touched snow, the way you wrote about this piece was awesome. you put it in such a short piece but really got the message across on how much fun it was for you. very nice piece. 5/5

Very well written it reminds me of the old childcraft books I used to love

This is cute, I'm not to big on friendship, or family poetry, but this wasn't bad at all... the flow was great, and the imagery was lovely. I surprisingly liked how short the stanzas were, there seemed small and innocent like the piese, your word gave the whole piece a sense of innocence, and childhood joy great job with that one... 5/5

I'm very happy to read this poem. I love it, I enjoyed reading it, but it also did something that a lot of poems on here don't, brought you back to a happy time.

Let's go out and play on the snow.
Le's go see it fall.

-second line should be let's

Other than that I wouldn't change a thing, I think it's a wonderful poem, You could probably argue that the syllables are off..but does it take away from the poem? not even a bit.

5/5

AWESOME JOB!

I liked this poem, I love nature poems. Umm, line two "le's" should be "Let's". Other then that I see nothing wrong with it. This is a poem that probably almost everyone could relate to in some way. 5/5

Wow, I love this it. It is completely adorable. I think you tied every thing together really well :) This poem is really good and I wouldn't change a thing...

But the second line should be "let's" instead of le's
Well done 5/5

Family the most important thing you can think of , very well writen !

i understand why you writen this poem ,

it touched me too and it showed the affection you have , great poem i enjoyed readin it
keep it up too !

That made tears come up in my eyes...brought back long buried memories of someone... good job!

Awe so sweet! i really liked very cute 5/5