Comments : TWO straight lines

  • 15 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    This is heart breaking :(
    Some lines are a little long, but it helps to the disjointment of the topic.
    What a great poem though!
    I don't usually like rhyming poems, but this one is great. I really liked it, keep writing!

  • 15 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    Wow. Mercury hits it right on by describing this poem as "heart breaking". I like how you used the whole concept of drugs and the "two straight lines". I think it brings it all together very well. I can see you have some talent. Keep on writing :)

    God Bless,
    Sarah