Comments : Empty Me

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    "As stars drift upon emptiness
    somehow they seems to know
    Inside this heart is loneliness
    bank drifts of winter snow"

    ^^ loved the imagery... it brings such sad and lonely feeling... and the snow mentioned in the last line made me feel the icicess that sadness brings ... very beautifully penned....

    "Perhaps a chance forthcoming
    an end to winter brings"

    ^^ there's optimism in these lines... every cloud has a silver lining ... well written... loved the imagery and the metaphor ...

    "But still here in this moment
    no end is there to see
    Just broken scattered pieces
    of a soulless empty me. "

    ^^ so beautifull.. profound... yet so sad... I just adored these lines... wonderful ending to a brilliant poem..

  • 15 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    What a saddening piece. Yet brilliantly penned as usual.

  • 15 years ago

    by ben thompson

    A beautifully sad write, nice flow and rhyme. enjoyed this one a lot. 5/5 all the best ben thompson

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Jeannie
    So much sadness is coming from your words.
    Beautiful as always :)
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    But still here in this moment
    no end is there to see
    Just broken scattered pieces
    of a soulless empty me.

    Wow, what an ending, this is breathtaking.
    Loved the whole poem.

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    But still here in this moment
    no end is there to see
    Just broken scattered pieces
    of a soulless empty me.

    Wow, what an ending, this is breathtaking.
    Loved the whole poem.

    all the best and take care