"As stars drift upon emptiness
somehow they seems to know
Inside this heart is loneliness
bank drifts of winter snow"

^^ loved the imagery... it brings such sad and lonely feeling... and the snow mentioned in the last line made me feel the icicess that sadness brings ... very beautifully penned....

"Perhaps a chance forthcoming
an end to winter brings"

^^ there's optimism in these lines... every cloud has a silver lining ... well written... loved the imagery and the metaphor ...

"But still here in this moment
no end is there to see
Just broken scattered pieces
of a soulless empty me. "

^^ so beautifull.. profound... yet so sad... I just adored these lines... wonderful ending to a brilliant poem..

What a saddening piece. Yet brilliantly penned as usual.

A beautifully sad write, nice flow and rhyme. enjoyed this one a lot. 5/5 all the best ben thompson

Jeannie
So much sadness is coming from your words.
Beautiful as always :)
Love Cindy

But still here in this moment
no end is there to see
Just broken scattered pieces
of a soulless empty me.

Wow, what an ending, this is breathtaking.
Loved the whole poem.

all the best and take care

But still here in this moment
no end is there to see
Just broken scattered pieces
of a soulless empty me.

Wow, what an ending, this is breathtaking.
Loved the whole poem.

all the best and take care