Comments : Drift

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    So short, yet so amazingly detailed. A short and sweet write from you, an honest confession, with a continuous rhyme that compliments the sentiments.

    I would have liked to see punctuation throughout this poem. Punctuation is very important in poetry, it lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well as adding to the overall flow.

    Overall a well written piece of poetry, keep up the good work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    This is a very sweet little poem . Again , perfect flow and flawless rhymes . Really well done .. I don't understand the "end" part .. It kinda threw me off . I also have one tiny suggestion :
    In hopes
    - change this to In hope, or Hoping ... Because in hopes doesn't really make much sense . Take care , another 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by isabel

    This is one of the sweetest poems I've ever read...
    It has quite a nice flow, so peaceful and soft...
    I'm not really sure how i can express it, but it seems like the reader itself can "drift" throughout the emotion of the poem... It's wonderful...

    Your wording is flawless and the images you create are so pure and delicate...

    Yet... The "End." part just took me off for a moment... I don't know if it fits very well to write at the end of the poem that the poem ended... Wouldn't you rather leave the reader lost in the feeling?

    still, an amazing write...
    5/5
    *isabel*

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    You have painted this poem with full of serenity. The words flows off the reader's tongue so smoothly. The imaginary which you have display here was really beautiful

    Through the distance, exceeding chance
    I've come in search of your romance

    _ I really this this stanza alot as distance doesn't seem to be a factor from persuing to be with your love

    Excellent Job
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Cyber Saiyan

    Good poem.

    It was a little shorter than I expected, but it still held the same qualities that your others have.

    Again, the flow was good, but it seemed to read really fast. I know thats not a very helpful comment, but the flow just carried through very quick. By the time I started, it seemed to be over. I was left wanting a little bit more. I think if you added a great closing line, it would help pull the poem to an end. As you have it written, it just seemed to drop off; it didnt seem to have an ending or come full circle back to the beginning like your other poems do.

    I did enjoy reading this poem; it is still well written, but honestly, I was left wanting more in the end.

    I rated it 4/5, but didnt leave a vote. I didnt want to pull down your rating.

    Best wishes.