Jeannie, I can't even tell you how much I love your work, you have a certain rhythm that flows so smoothly and your rhymes are always perfect! The content hauntingly sad and full of emotion.Love it!

In embers burnt, the sky turns black
As ashes fall in tears of loss
And heartache weeps into the night
When restless dreams in pain are tossed
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Love ... love ... love these lines Jeannie.

Wonderful woven as always ... the sadness flows through each and every line and holds the readers attention tightly.

Great read by a wonderful poet ... thanks for sharing Auntie

Wow...
Honestly, this is amazing. I find this poem truly flawless from the first to the last line, and can't add any suggestion/critique for the improvement. I admire the vividness of every stanza, your descriptions are superbly dark yet so elegant, and they left me in awe. I wish this write was longer, because every stanza is deeply enjoyable and refreshing. I could clearly imagine everything that you portrayed here, with a hint of eerie atmosphere and amazing choice of words.
I like the rhythm/flow of the poem, too. You did great job with rhymes throughout the poem.
All the metaphors are breathtaking. I especially like the ending, it's profound. This is one of the best poems in 'dark' category I've read in a while.

Greatly done.

Nice poem. A masterpiece here!