"Suspense hangs from his weakened lips
Words tumble out, his wary mind trips"

= Beautiful opening lines. Your word choice is fabulous. There's one thing I'm not so sure of: I don't think the word "weakened" sounds so great. I mean, I like it because it gets what you're saying across, but when I read it, it didn't sound right to me.

"Everything blurs, life makes no sense
Flashing before him, his decision made
Subconsciously noticing an internal wince
The pain of the choice seems to fade"

= I love the way you rhymed. First two lines, third/fifth, fourth/sixth. I don't see it very often, it's unique. Again, your word choice really is amazing. Sometimes people over-do it with big words, and sometimes people under-do it (which I am guilty of), but I think you managed to get it just right.

"Either direction, a life will be complete
Another final smile bringing on the heat
An innocent accused of being the fake
The lady or the tiger, many would say
His only fault is a simple, solitary mistake
Watch him crumble, don't move, stay"

= I LOVELOVE the second line here. It's simple, but it really says so much. The third line I'm not so crazy about. "Am innocent accused.." - an innocent what? Also, it kind of throws off the flow. Still, a good job.

"His bones crushing to powder, the fatal lie
The words slowly cease, his tongue a tie
A black cloud covers the bare flashing light
All he wanted to teach and speak was gone
The truth wasn't really worth the deadly fight
His legacy, love or truth, goes silently unknown"

= Woooow! This is a beautiful ending. While I'm not sure I understand the meaning behind the piece, it's obvious to see that it wonderfully written. As most people know, the ending should be the.. BAM! part of a poem, haha, and this is just that. One thing: "gone" and "unknown" aren't quite rhymes. I'd go over that again, so you can keep with the rhyme scheme throughout the piece.

Five out of five. [5/5]

`Briana (:

Lexieee! This is wonderful, I love the rhyme scheme, a slight variant on having couplets all the way through :)

The imagery here was wonderful, and everything flowed so well and the idea is lovely... okay I'm gushing now lol but it's lovely!

5/5 and nomnomnomination!

Keep up the wonderfulness! (Seems to be my word now haha)(And yes I made up that word too :D)

Keep writing LexieBean,
Emily :)

Wow. nice...