Comments : I hate it

  • 14 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Hey, I love this poem. Its very well written and the rhythm and rhyme is perfect. Except on this line:

    "I hate how you did this,
    And that you know how much I care."

    The second line kinda throws you off I think you should have it"

    I hate how you did this,
    Knowing how much I care.

    Thats just my opinion, adding extra words make is longer than the you want it to bo. Other than that I love it, very well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Omg I hate spelling errors lol last line I meant adding extra words makes it longer than you'd want it to be**

  • 14 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Omg I hate spelling errors lol last line I meant adding extra words makes it longer than you'd want it to be**