Comments : House Of Lies

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Deana my friend you brought me to tears with this piece.

    Teacher smiles and looks away
    Preacher preaches on
    Each day around three o'clock
    She takes the long way home
    ^^^
    How many times a blind eye is given! And the reality is , it really does happen.

    Congrats on the club to club win Deana, well deserved. This piece sure lives in the mind long after the read.

    Touching touching read !!!!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Good flow and rhythm in this piece. Congratulations on the win! Well deserved!

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Deana
    This was a very heart breaking piece. I can see why it won.
    Excellent job!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Deana,
    What a beautifully presented piece of work you have here. Very saddening but very beautifully written.
    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 14 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    Wow that was beautiful, I really liked the way you used the beginning and end. Very beautiful. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    WOOOO, that was awsome. I really loved how you repeated

    No beauty in a house of lies
    No tears on Satan's pillow

    and you were able to fit it so well together. The description was great and flow too smooth, i liked the idea and theme. A true poem nice work.

  • 14 years ago

    by ilikepurple222

    This was so incredibly sad! but i loved it! blind eye is right. great job! please read my "change" poem if you could?

  • 14 years ago

    by Mimed Lovette

    This injects a hint of sorrow and sadness after I finish reading this. And I could understand how life goes on for other people when you are in pain, or rather, they choose not to observe and understand.
    This is my favourite line: Lowered lashes hides the shame.
    5/5!

  • 13 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Awee. Beautiful.