Comments : Emotional Solstice

  • 14 years ago

    by Deana

    A bitter wind blew through the reeds,
    Inciting every falling leaf
    I loved this line Jenn, It shows so much depth in your thought, that the wind actually incites the leaves to fall, excellent!

    The things you loved, but left behind

    An excellent way to sum up the poem....beautifully written!

  • 14 years ago

    by The Queen

    Bits of green throughout the land
    Reminding you how life began
    Trial and error, end to start
    Courage heals a broken heart
    ^^These lines were my favourite...It was painfully beautiful....Trial and error, end to start - it normally takes tons of courage to sum up things, experiences, heartaches, feelings, dreams into that perspective...

  • 14 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Truly evocative of experience I, too, have had..
    graphic and interesting images..

    One observation for your consideration..:
    In the beginning you spoke in first person..'my head', I led, I was..etc
    Then you changed to you and your...
    I suggest this piece would be even more effective, and powerful, if you remain in first person throughout...

    • 6 years ago

      by Lost One

      Disagree. It remains in first person throughout. "You and your", were observations made by "I"