Comments : If I Tell You

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Nitin
    This poem is stunning....so beautiful yet such a sadness coming from within your words.

    If I tell you to sleep with open eyes
    Will you still dream of me dying
    Hold my hands and kiss my head
    Will you still hear me crying

    I hope you know how much holding someones hands when they need you means.

    Look at the dividing line in air
    Separating my skin from your skin
    Drowning my soul in your aroma
    Repeatedly imagining our sweet sin

    Sometimes our minds can bring so many things to us that are unreachable.

    If I ask you to be on your knees forever
    Will you pray till we meet on the other side
    Keep your hands and knees folded
    Wrap in my memories within your mind

    What a wonderful thought....not a happier warmer place to be then wrapped in the memories of the one you love so much.

    I have chased horizon, kissed sun
    Yet craving for a touch from you
    With angels all around, I walk alone
    Wondering if your sky is still blue

    Always remember you never will walk alone....and as long as love exists here or there the Sky's will always be blue.

    Excellent job on this piece. It really touched my heart and soul. Bringing tears to my eyes.
    I love you yaar

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Sad indeed. Thoughts of meeting your love on the other side just waiting for them to be with you again. Well done, Nitin.

  • 8 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This was really beautiful yet sad, not sure if theres much more to add to whats been said. This was well written though, & I enjoyed it. Nicely done.

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    As I read this a scene from the movie Ghost
    comes to my mind..a touching write..

  • 8 years ago

    by Princess Love

    Another great one. It has a Nitin touch. Loved it!!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Nitin,
    This is a stunningly beautiful and heartfelt write. From opening to closing you have poured out emotions making this a true gem. Though it has a sadness to it, the love that is emulated throughout the piece speaks volumes. Wonderful Write.

    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 8 years ago

    by anand singh

    The sadness in your words has touched the hearts of all who read them.This is another emotionally charged piece that tugs at the heartstrings.
    The meaning of this write, i'm here to tell you my friend that it is possible for the one we love to await us on the otherside.This is a promise made by our lord and savior Jesus Christ.
    An enjoyable read.
    Paul...

  • 8 years ago

    by Samuel Dimafelix

    Great poem! N0 m0re can i add

  • 8 years ago

    by Sourav

    Speechless. So very well written. Emotions are expressed beautifully, lovely construction of the lines. Mesmerizing poem! Amazing!

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is so sad yet beautifully written. Well written, 5/5. Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    What a sad and heartfelt piece. Beautiful job!It flows good and the rhyming isn't forced!

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats to you Nitin....a well deserved win for a beautiful poem.
    ~Bravo~
    Love you
    Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Congrats on the win Nitin! Such a beautiful and emotional poem full of longing and tenderness.....well crafted and emotional! Bravo!!! Take care, Debbie

  • 8 years ago

    by Fading Memory

    I want you to be top rated cause my gurl won't come back , enjoy your time with your thoughts while they are havin fun and over Wheeling

  • 8 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Congrats :]
    Way to represent the club.

  • 8 years ago

    by Countess of Monte Cristo

    Sorry for reading this too late, but this one is a beautiful from you, Nitin. The last sentence was the cherry on top of the icing, and the rest was divine.

    This one is a 5 for me my friend. a 5 indeed. Walah

  • 8 years ago

    by Sourav

    I think this is a well deserved win! This poem is fantastic! As I said earlier it's mesmerizing! Congrats Nitin! :)

  • 8 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Congrats for winning.5/5.
    You are a creative soul ,truly divine by nature.You pour your heart in your writes.Take care.GOD BLESS.

  • 8 years ago

    by th little lies

    It bring me the feeling.

  • 8 years ago

    by Jose Delapaz

    Wow Nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i like it..........