Comments : Falling Apart

  • 14 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ha! I loved how apart was a p a r t....that was actually really cool I never seen that before....I love you writing KJ..you have a way of expressing your emotions that men usually have a hard time with. You really make your readers feel what you're feeling and you make them WANT the same feeling as well...this was a great write! I think you made this short poem a great read!

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    These are the type of love poems I enjoy most. They have simple vocabulary and they just espress exactly how the writer feels and how in love they are. Most people on this site try and throw in huge words that not even they can understand to make their peotry seem more complex. Most people (especially guys) think that love is all about sex and physical aspects but to me its about so much more than that. The simple things like holding hands and talking for hours and hours on end without getting bored or tired of the person. The way you feel when there gone, the loneliness inside you that cares nothing about sex you just want to see them and hold them. I love the beginning of this piece because when you really care for someone all the little things get noticed. How you can hear and feel there heart as it beats with yours. The greatest feeling in life is not to hear the words I love you, it is to say them and mean it with all your heart. Fantastic job 5/5 well done

  • 14 years ago

    by WakingFreedom

    Oh my. I loved this poem. It is short and sweet, simple and emotion filled. It may not be that long but you have filled it out with a feeling that can stretch on forever. There is nothing I can give but a 5. Thank you for the beautiful read.

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Short, sweet and beautiful!

  • 14 years ago

    by Cale

    Very well done!! I love the emotion and the flow was amazing!!! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Shamia

    Nice read...I just knew you were explaining all the resons for how deep your love was...the ending was a reminder of what it was written for...loved how you delivered it!!