Nice work Nik. I like the questioning nature of the words you used. It gives the reader a sense of puzzlement and the image of a young woman asking these things of the one she loves.

Just as the title your poem too is something to read and fall into...nicely penned!

Very strong poem that held many emotions. Your words convey your feelings very nicely and your message is something a lot of people can relate to. You did a great job writing for the contest and I was really touched with this poem. Your imagery is really good as I get a clear picture of what is happening around me. You seem to be writing with more maturity with each write and I am glad to see you using your talents to the fullest!

In all, I found this piece full of love, hurt, and pain. A touching piece to say the least and I am glad I have been able to see your poetry from when you started on here up until now! Great job and keep writing.

Perfectly penned piece!! I loved your wording and I loved how you took the title and really created something so simple and beautiful, and quite frankly a little sad....

Its so sad that this poem might bot be true, might be for a contest, but its so real for other people out there who have had a lover leave them. I found this quite relateable!
Great poem Nik :)
Chelsey

Mindblowing right from the start.

Our love was like oxygen hanging
from open lips after a tender
kiss... so pure and untouched.

Right from the choice of title to the choice of words..simply amazing

I knew I was meant to be
a part of you since our
language as humans began.

You really took this to another level here. Great write indeed.

all the best and take care

Breathtaking! That first line hit my heart fiercely, wow. I must say I am a huge fan of mythology, so the that 2nd stanza was right on for me. I love the tenderness you held, as you also embraced the ignorance that ran bliss. It screams first love to me. Enjoyable read, have a nice day :)

It's wonderful the flow is flawless and smooth.. but the stanza that really got me is the last stanza,i love how you end it. I can say that i can somehow relate myself with the emotions.

NIk
Wonderful job on the club contest. Beautiful entry. So much emotion flow from the your words. Showing how deeply the love is felt.
Take care
*hugs
Cindy

A very nice poem, penned wel and flows brilliantly, you did a lovely job on this, i enjoyed reading this.

Tara

I found this to be right on the money when it comes to young love. We're so naive and oblivious to everything and everyone else, we truly feel that at 17 we know love better than anyone else. I'm not sure if people truly want to be with there first love forever or if they just don't want anybody else to be with them forever? I'm going to write that down....thats great, like this poem :) 5/5 well done!

You stuck with the theme and painted a very romantic picture with beautiful imagery that flowed so freely.. Bravo!