So sad I'm so sorry for u

Thanks i write whats real
i cant stand when ppl write about feeling that are not there it just drives me crazy
cuz how is it suppose to be good if you dont have or knoe the feeling

I guess you did not focus on the rhyme much but rather told your story, which is perfectly fine, though I'd recommend you to try and make it flow a bit better. Your poem has other than that a good structure though.

You told me you loved me
and open your arms for me to stay
you told me you need me
and held me close
you told me no one could replace me
and kissed me softly
for everytime you told me something i believed you
but in the end it wasnt true

^ The repetition you used at the beginning of this stanza is quite nice. Directing the poem to the person who did that to you was a good idea. The thing is that you basicially told the end of the story by the last line of this stanza already. That may lead the reader into stop reading before your poem is even half way through.

When i said i loved you
i thought you would open your arms and do the same
i told you i need you
and you told Go away
i said no one in the world can ever you place you*
but you said are you sure cause i can find some to replace you**

^Picking up the lines you've used in your first stanza, now from a different point of view, is a good thing. I'd change the line to the following though * 'I said no one in the world can ever replace you' and the other one to this **but you said: 'are you sure? Cause i can find someone to replace you', that'd make reading easier and simply makes more sense. Though it's quite the opposite of what you stated in your first stanza but maybe it changed during the relationship.

The last stanza is alright too.

If this happened to you, you did the right thing believing him, since you're supposed to be able to trust him and his words. I don't think it's your fault he acted that way and didn't tell you the truth. You sure deserve better. Keep up writing.

Thank yuh... xD

This is amazing.

Thanks you

I Like This...I Can Completely Feel Your Pain...Nice Piece!

Thanks

So true... I love this tbh x