Tony u get better each time. Keep it up :) 5/5 x

I had to stop for a second and reread this, I have a horse ,and an animal lover. I detest cruelty and abuse.
You got inside the mind of a slave to sport and let us see through it's sad eyes. Awesome job

I really love this one, so much understanding in this poem :) 5/5

This is amazing mate :)

I stand in wait inside a little shack
I feel like a slave as he gets on my back
I start to sweat my heart increases in pace
I feel like I shouldn't be here, am I in the wrong place

^ This stanza is a good beginning because you simply start to describe what's curently going on and the emotions of the speaker. I had no clue who the speaker is in this stanza and I was not sure whether that is what I'll end up figuring out either, which made me really curious.
Allow me to suggest something: - exchange "in" in the first verse with "and"
- also put a comma at the following place: I start to sweat[,] my heart increases in pace

All I hear now is the sound of a gun
It frightens me to death, so all I do is run
There people staring and shouting all the time
Hoping that ill make them rich, hoping im first across the line

^ You set a really vivid image with this stanza, thanks to the detailed description of the situation and emotions. This hint goes into a completly different direction than the first one and that causes me to wonder whether I should be grateful for getting an hint, which has nothing to do with the first, or if this is supposed to be confusing me. Those aspects make this a good stanza that keeps the tension up.
suggestions: - There should be There are, ill = I'll, im = I'm

I feel a mighty hit as my body starts to fold
I try to run faster as the pain takes control
All I see is black and white I start to feel ill
Then finally its over I can finally stand still

^ I like the rapidity you brought into this stanza, it underlines the content really well. Also the information you gave may be quite obvious if the reader knew who this was about but since he is still exploring it's quite tough to figure with what you offer, which keeps the tension till the very last stanza. That's good since reader won't get bored as this poem is not too long.
The only thing you have to change is "its" to "it's"

All I hear is abuse, I tried my best
Why do I have to take all this I just need to rest
They leave me in my shack beaten black and blue
Do horses not have feeling? Am I just a toy to you?

^ This ending was really good because I nowhere expected this. Now that I'm through with the poem it's obvious but I would of never guessed. I think it's also a nice idea to get back to the shack where you first started.
suggestion: Why do I have to take all this[;] I just need to rest

Overall this is a great poem and it was a pleasure reading.

Gud..one.. tony..

I had to read it twice to grasp the real meaning ..

It's vague, and this method is mega-beautiful..

Until the last line I discovered the story..

Abuse is so cruel, in deed.. And it's hard to be instead of that horse. Btw, I love horses!

Amazing job with these descriptive thoughts.. And the atmosphere was dark at the beginning which is why I thought it fits under "Dark & Fantasy".. but as I told you, I understood it at the end. So really really good job!

5/5

Nice write i like it,....sjows ur feelings....well done:)
5/5

Well, my Jen said it all, she is genius, there are some fillers that weren't needed, you copuld get rid of them, actually...I loved the rhymes though and the message here was really interesting! well-done, Tony! :)