Comments : Winter (Acrostic)

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    I think you rocked it in here as you really delivered an amazing piece of winter. I can feel the ice and the howling freezing winds all over and along each icy word. Great job. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Holly,*

    I was excited when I saw you had a fairly recent nature piece posted, I love a good nature poem but you don't find them as often these days, not pure ones anyway. Most of the poems are nature revolving around love and sadness (actually I do this because I can't write pure nature poems and pull them off haha) but you've done that here, you've written a nature poem that is just about the beautiful of winter and I love it! I loved it more when I saw it was an acrostic. Great job on attempting a form!

    What I enjoyed most about this piece was the description; it definitely set that winter atmosphere. I liked the image of hands knotted; it was a relaxed everyday winter image. All of us tend to knot our left and right hand together to keep warm but I don't think I would have ever thought of describing that as "knotted." I loved that by the way.

    My second thought when I read the word knotted was two loved hands entwined, probably not what you're going for but winter can bring out the holding hands and keeping each other warm thing.

    The only suggestion I have with this piece is to place a bit of punctuation here and there to help with the flow. When I read this it was constantly flowing from one line to the next and the imagery can come off a little jumbled without the pauses, you really have to read it slowly this way to grasp the stunning imagery.

    -Mel