Comments : You Had Me At Hello

  • 5 years ago

    by Sylvia

    If we could actually hold sweet and/or nice in our hands, this poem would surely be there. It gives the reader that sense of sweetness and niceness (Not sure that is a word).

  • "One smile breaks the lock over my mending heart,
    Chains covering old wounds shatter with ease."

    Those two lines...touched me beyond belief. They just give me such a vivid image of a lock opening that's over a heart and chains just falling away from scars... The imagery in this poem is spectacular.

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 5 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Such a sweet and innocent write... i realy loved the how you have expressed your fellings :)
    //Peace fills my mind whenever I'm near you.
    Darling, you had me at hello.

    //
    very beautiful lines :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Fireworks explode across the pages in my mind,
    Taking me back to the first time we met.

    these were my fav lines. you have expressed love in a beautiful way.

  • 5 years ago

    by The Unknown

    Impressed !

  • 5 years ago

    by Jad

    Krista, this poem is very beautiful with its simplistic words and meaning but I found it to be unique though I see poems like this a lot. You came at the poem from a different view with a happy ending and a sweet story that makes the reader feel at ease and also like they are the one receiving the love from this wonderful person. The structure was solid and it had a good overall flow that carried from line to line.

    "One simple word takes me back to that place,
    The loneliness I've felt evaporates into the air.
    One smile breaks the lock over my mending heart,
    Chains covering old wounds shatter with ease."
    ^^^
    This had to be my favorite stanza and I also think the strongest one though I might lean more to the last one being stronger. Anyway, the stanza had some wonderful imagery and your emotions and feelings come off the paper with good taste and clarity.

    Overall, this poem has a ton of potential as a wonderful piece and as far as I am concerned it is perfect in many aspects. Many people can relate to this poem to, which makes it even more meaningful to that person. I'm glad to see your writing skills improving. Great job and keep writing!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Lovely lines~

    Fireworks explode across the pages in my mind,
    Taking me back to the first time we met.
    It's a fairytale, a sweet story of love,
    Capturing two lost souls in this mad world.

    What a breathtaking composition! 5/5!

  • 5 years ago

    by Faith Ann

    Your voice bringing me to a calm I'd never known

    this I can relate to. Its just something to think sbout the one you love that makes you calm and mellow <3
    good job:)

  • 5 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    I've felt this way before, this is inspiring, I love this, reminds me of my best friend Josh, I've loved him since I met him near the beginning of the school year, 100/100, outstanding job