Andy-

What an In depth piece... The feelings you have expressed just broke my heart... Keep writing and expressing those feelings.

"All My love turned to dust
in a blink of an eye
your love turned to rust
now it's time to die."

^^^^ when love goes sour, you do feel like dying... Its truly a heart breaking feeling... and this stanza clearly expresses those feelings.

"Pressure building in My veins
blood cells dancing as they fry
stressing fractures start to drain
now it's time to die."

^^^^ the feeling I got with this stanza Is now the anger has set In... and your at a boiling point, or breaking point... powerful mid stanza!

"Laying in a pool of blood
looking into the sky
My heart starts to flood
now it's time to die."

^^^^ your ending stanza brought tears to my eyes... this is the point where you give up... the pain Is just too much...

I felt this poem from beginning to end and I just wanted you to know in depth, how much this poem touched my heart.... well done!