Comments : Scars

  • 5 years ago

    by neon sunset

    I can feel the emotion in this poem. it really good. you have lots of potential.

  • 5 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Thank u so much for liking my poem..i dont write poems often,but hav alwys loved reading novels n all..i will try to write more.

  • 5 years ago

    by lOsT sOuL

    A great work.. you have penned down really nice words..it's really a sad poem.. but everything is perfect.. it flows so nicely & smoothly.. i can totaly relate in ur words

    It's not that I want you to regret about,
    Because you are that someone I am lost without.
    You might someday feel the way I feel,
    But I fear, old scars are never going to heal.

    This is one of the Stanza i loved most... each words are so strong which shows the imperfection of love.. great work.. :) 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Very nicely written. Smooth flow and heartly expressed. Great choice of words. Loved the simplicity & emotion of this piece. You surely should write more.

    all the best and take care

  • 5 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    It feels so glad to read these comments.thank u all.i think my poems are a bit childish..i will try my best to improve.

  • 5 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Thank u for ur valuable comment.^_^

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    "To understand painful smile painted on my
    face."
    Add 'the' between understand and painful. It'll flow better.

    "To understand what is so harsh and what
    are my fears,"
    Change it to: "To understand what's harsh and what my fears are"
    But seems you're rhyming 'fears' to the next line, I suggest: "...and to understand my fears"

    "And why did I choose to smile through the
    tears."
    Change it to: "And why I chose to smile through the tears."

    "You might someday feel the way I feel,
    But I fear, old scars are never going to heal."
    Love the ending so much. Great write 5/5 Keep writing :)

    -X

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Sorry.. double posted^^

  • 5 years ago

    by Jenn

    I really liked this. You clearing expressed the point you wanted to make with this poem.

    "I'm trying hard to make myself strong,
    To let go of emotions that lasted for so long.
    But now you come again to fill up the space,
    To understand painful smile painted on my face."

    This part in particular is my favorite. It drips with sorrow filled longing. Bitter sweet.
    Great write! 5/5
    Jenn.

  • 5 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Thank u all of you for your encouraging words and valuable suggestions^_^

  • 5 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I wont go in detail, js wanna say..al in al a complete poem..i wud lv to read a new one frm u soon..

  • 5 years ago

    by Amy

    Really great poem.

  • 4 years ago

    by Amreen

    Emotionally captivating piece... you rock with your rhymes... <3<3