This is really scary and dark!I felt the pressure.
I liked it!Well written!

Oh thanks steven happy you liked it ....

Wow wow it is a little bit scary but i love it

Thanks dear ....:)

This seemed like it was based off a movie. The rhymes were good, but in some parts, they were predictable (Ex. Light/Night)
Just some errors I spotted, though I'll try not to change your style that much:
-on the first two lines, knifes=knives lifes=lives and a question mark would be nice..
-existance=existence
-"I sta&rted to fear for myself"--started
-hopping=hoping
-"didn't you notice those spirits did you think they were fake??...."---I liked the idea here. The 'killer' perhaps said fake, because maybe the persona thought the 'spirits' and 'vampires' were just costumes. A problem here, though. Ellipsis only consist of three periods, and they weren't needed here. As well as in the other lines, use only three periods and not exceeding that if you want to retain ellipsis there.
Still, a good read. Keep it up.
-X

Caught up in this, love the story and how capturing it is.

Well done again x