Comments : The Future Love Of You And Me

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    OMGoodness that poem made me get my mind off the fact Josh is mad at me and if I don't play my cards right this could turn into a big fight, this cheer me up, maybe Josh will love me again

  • 11 years ago

    by Reaper

    Very Very Very Amazing!!!!!!!!! :) 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by FallenSkyler

    This is really great :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    The assurances you give to your loved one are warm and real. I would suggest you put some commas especially the first stanza so that the poem flows better. Good work lav

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    Josh just read it, he thinks it's a good poem, it's a miracle, lol.

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    Nice poem
    i like it a lot
    have many emotions
    powerful emotion all the way through the poem till the ending line
    flow was good
    word choice was nice too
    some grammar mistakes like
    "Our daughter proud to call us mom and dad,"
    u should say "Our daughter is proud"

    "Seeing us still in love like that once ago day."
    this line wasnt flowing as well as the rest of the poem

    I suggest u change it to
    "Seeing us still in love like that day ago."
    flowing better for me like that

    other than this i love this poem a lot
    but to be honest i can expect what u are writing
    "as somebody told me be4" makes it a bit boring to read as u dont change the image you try to show a lot
    i think you should try new style to write in and look for new images and so

    still good piece
    5/5 keep writing =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    True love, so sweet. <3 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by PrinceLawrence

    Positive outlook, A pure romantic indeed..
    great writings..
    5/5