This is written beautifully. An excellent poem 5/5. Your work is great !

Very sad poem 5/5

Everything in this poem is written perfectly. I like the way you worded it.

My life, my miseries
what happened is part of history
I never, lied about my past
never cried, for being in last

Nice starting part. I have nothing to say about this because this part is written in subtle way. I can picture out the darkness and the feeling of the persona here.

In world full of losers
I'm just among these users
They use to call me their hero
what it really meant, a big zero

Good rhyme. Nicely penned.

Life Purpose was to rise above all
inside there lies fear to fall
Scars from past are still engraved
painful memories of being enslaved

Yeah, I agree with you past is hard to forget because it remains in our memories..though, it is string in today and to the future yet, we should take it positively and learn from it.

I use to cry in dark, so no one could see
shedding tears into ocean of debris
Eyes turn bloodshot due to continious shower
sometime even thought of a jump from tower

the first line is so relatable..there are times, that we cry in the corner and expecting that there are someone that can comfort our feelings or even listen us to subside the feeling that vent us down...but in the last part you mean something suicidal--well, harming or ending your self is not a wise way to escape your burden--there are a lot of things to solve that, just be positive and your life is worthful.

Still walk even when the world rest
paitently(typo: patiently) enduring this painful test
For how long, I have to face this eternal pain
For how long, I'll rise just to fall again

Good ending--I love the way you wrestles your life and become strong. yeah, that's life "rise and fall" but everytime you fall..be strong and fight the trials and challenges of life. Over all. Well-penned. I like this poem..I really enjoy.
5/5
~C

Thank you for reading my poetry with full concentration..
You have given review wonderfully..
I thanx you alot for the appreciation.. It really mean special to me :)

Thank you for reading my poetry with full concentration..
You have given review wonderfully..
I thanx you alot for the appreciation.. It really mean special to me :)

Wow I feel like crying,,it hit my heart big,,sad and how I relate to some of ur amazingly written stanzas,,,there's a reason ur on my favorite authors list :) 5/5

Wow this poem is soo true im soo sorry sweety! good poem and emotions

Lady Anastasia

You express your depression perfectly. I hope all is okay though..?
You speak truth when you say we live in a world of users (not in those words..) so few people are genuine these days, so many play deceit so lightly. :(

I loved the rhyming. And the flow was great.

5/5

This a beautiful piece of work. I can tell you are speaking from experience. Reading this poem I can see your point of view which is excellent. This is amazing. I know my poems are awful compared to this masterpiece. Really well done. This is terrific. Keep up the good work. ~Dominique Lewis <3~