I have noticed that some lines are missing commas, place those commas, for example..

but still I cant contain
the fact that we grow old
....

There should be a comma between 'still' and 'I'

and also
....so please lay down
don't worry about a thing...

a comma should be placed between 'please' and 'lay'..

lastly...
see I don't cope
nor surrender, I render
agenda is not my friend..

between 'see' and 'I'..

overall, i gave this piece a 5 cause it was good and i enjoyed it. Well written and i must say, your style of writing is amazing, i lie it very much.

This is a very good poem, Matthew. I really like it, however I think that there are a couple typos in here...

Typos: second stanza, third line, 'cant' should be 'can't.' Third stanza, last line, I believe that 'are' is supposed to be 'our' because you are taking about YOUR soul.

'And gently we trickle
in amongst the crowd
cause nothing but a ripple
though we shout so loud'

^ Beautiful ending. I loved this. I really have nothing to say about it, just that I thought it was a really, really good beginning. I like how you said that you caused a 'ripple' because it is so true. We are just a little blip in the universe.

Overall, this is a really good poem. I agree with Paul - punctuation would make this piece a little better.

Very good poem, Matthew.

Excellent
5/5