After reading this beautiful poem of uor,,,jus two words came ...

lucky guy..

I enjoyed the rhymes here; it gave the poem a nice, sweet tone.

There are a few grammatical errors that can easily be fixed:

'I had heard people in love saying'
Had should be 'have'

'days suddenly beautiful and sky more blue'
'are' after days would make the flow better. 'is' after sky as well. An article (the) before 'sky' would be better.
'more blue' should be 'bluer', but I guess it's alright since you are rhyming :)

'With this treasured care hidden in heart,'
I think 'my' before heart would make it flow better.

'Like the summer evening ending tiresome days,'
I think this would better be revised to: 'the summer evening end the tiresome days'

Overall, I enjoyed reading to piece. Great job :)

Xanthe is rite abt errors..

I'm sorry this is kind of late :( I have been a little side tracked lately.

I have a question about this poem. Are you trying to say that you have never experienced love before? The reason I am asking this is because it sounds like that to me, and if it is then you have a little grammatical error in the second line of the first stanza...the 'not' should not be there. It is just that as I was reading this, it sounded like you were being in love for the first time. I might be wrong though.

I like this poem - it is very dreamlike to me. The flow is good, and the content is beautiful - nothing beats falling in love for the first time ^.^

Excellent
5/5

I think love is the best muse for poetry. It always gives radiates hope and happiness...and this did it for me. I smiled through the whole thing. :)

The rhymes gave the poem a simple, sweet tone. It reminds me of someones first time falling in love. <3

Wow excellent poem

It seems U r in love...happy for u;-)

Love oho...is it really that r u falling for someone?

OH, I really touch with the last message of your poem..it so lovely and well written piece...I missed reading with your poems, too..friend..just keep it up and write more beautiful poems:))5/5

~goodbless

Well written, LM!

Hold on to that one person that makes you feel that way. Love is so precious and often so fragile at the start. Be sure to always act from the heart and speak from the soul and you'll be okay:)

It was nice to read what your country looks like in between the lines. When time permits I will want to see how you live in that beautiful country of yours:)

Keep writing!
5/5 Ingrid

Oh my goodness, I LOVE IT, so going on wall of favorites, great job, your heart has created a most treasurable gift, the talent of words, your heart holds the secret to wonderful poetry

Oh my goodness, I LOVE IT, so going on wall of favorites, great job, your heart has created a most treasurable gift, the talent of words, your heart holds the secret to wonderful poetry

Lovely LM... I liked the feel and flow of this... it just kept me hooked .. And it feels so different when u are in love and you explained it well in this:)