Comments : With No Horizons

  • 5 years ago

    by Hellon

    Sometimes I come across a poem which I just can't find words to use in a comment....this is one of them. I had another a couple of weeks ago too that I just couldn't find a suitable comment to add to.....I never expected another so soon but here you have given it to me....

    Wake up
    Because cowardice is an ocean,
    it comes fatal like a single wave
    And sometimes so cold,
    So tepid you can hardly
    feel it on your feet -
    Yet it lingers

    Best stanza in the whole verse...this alone is worth nominating IMHO!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    There are so many parts in this poem that make me speechless and send shivers up my arms. You make a point with your words and you show the reader why these lines need to be broken, why there needs to be no division, no horizon, two people able to be one. I really can't say much more about this poem and how it affects me....it just seems to touch a new perspective. That's why I am so captivated by it. You write with truth and your own thoughts really take their own actions- your style is unique, I liked how you wrote with such a neat flow, everything felt connected. It's encouraging, provoking, emotional and I see wisdom in it too. Your voice has such verity in it and you make me try to understand that well. That oneness, that we don't have to see the sky and sea as separated. I like near the end how you interweave "you" and "me" and tell of the result: freedom. Really enjoyed reading your write! Congrats on the win!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Nema, this was just brilliant. I can't tell you how many times I've read this because I've stopped counting. I don't know why youve ever stopped writing, but I sure am glad your back and can grace us all with your amazing talent.

    Your first stanza is absolutely incredible. I envy your creativity there with the use of "between", then you describe that as thin, and compare it to a horizon..Oh if only you can see what I envision in my head.

    Wake up
    Because cowardice is an ocean,
    it comes fatal like a single wave
    And sometimes so cold,
    So tepid you can hardly
    feel it on your feet -
    Yet it lingers

    ^ gave me goosebumps. I agree with Hellon, best stanza of the whole poem.

    So happy you have won and are featured on the front page, I will be sure to send people your way to read this because it really deserves more credit!

    • 5 years ago

      by Nema

      Thank you heaps Chels :) You really are that sweet! To be completely fair, I wouldn't have appeared anywhere if it wasn't for the great Hellon.
      I'm working on getting some poetry words back :) Thanks for your support and for remembrance!!

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    <3 This touched me way so hard. Will come back with a detailed comment. But wanted to say ..a well-deserved win.

  • 5 years ago

    by One Man Clan

    You know, It's poetry like this that gets through to the most Black of hearts.
    you didn't fail to inspire me fully
    I hope Syria will forever be free from tyrants and harm

    god bless you

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Lovely tribute, Nema. I've been finding it so hard to comment on poems right now and this would just be useless.. but just wanted you to know I love this piece; the clever play on words, creating double meanings, repetition, subtle imagery - all so perfect and breathtaking.
    To me, the tone in the beginning was quite calm. but when I reached the "no this in not a love poem".. it showed your voice. It was really powerful - as though I'm hearing it, rather than reading this..
    Of course the message itsepf is powerful. Its just that the tone, I found very impacting aswell.
    If yhere were no 'horizons', lines dividing us, and we all just become one - or act as one, we'd all be free. Lovely. Keep writing,

  • 5 years ago

    by Adelle

    Your poem is beautiful, wonderfully written, it flows beautifully and it pulls you in till your there sitting as one with the poet.