Comments : Idealistic Sanctimonious Bullshit

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    The cutesy fluffy title caught my eye.....jk
    Love the power and pure anger in this. You are almost as angry at yourself as you are them.
    Yet there is a suggestion of strength in here.
    Great story telling throughout.
    I thought it was awesome.

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    It was just today that I noticed that the posters
    on the wall are crooked. Maybe it is I that is
    crooked and the wall has been straight all
    along, the posters hung with absolute care.

    - I say things and think things like this all the time, I think I am normal, it is everyone else who is insane!

    I want a prescription for the intensity of my
    emotions but I don't want to become a zombie.
    - from this I relate to it in the way that no matter what you suffer with or feel, they say there is a tablet for it, but yet they come with side affects which make you withdrawn and tired and then you begin to wonder which is best.

    Sometimes I walk the path of self-vindication.
    I've wished I was a better person even at the
    age of three.

    Same shit. Different day.

    - this makes me relaise you have been through a lot of pain and I wonder about your childhood becuase you mention quite depressive thoughts at only the age of three which is sad.

    But, I've been addicted to pain, sewing needles
    pushed deep into the eager flesh of palms.
    Razor blades gliding deep into milky flesh like
    cutting through soft Swiss.

    Alcohol replacing blood.

    Drugs replacing God

    - this is very deep because you describe things which sound so harmful but yet it shows how much pain you were feeling in order to do these things to cope. How desperate you were to escape.

    I dine on a plate of stars, close enough for you to
    cut my heart into devour-able pieces.

    - this line is very powerful and unique, I really like it.

    Your whole poem is again very deep and I relate to it. It shows so much about you and it is like you started writing one thing but then more things came into your head and so you let them flow out as if you were having flashbacks from every aspect of your life. This was very expressive and it drew me in, felt like I was really reading things form your heart and getting to know you.

    Excellent write.