Oooohhhh I love this!! Kinda of dark, kind of blunt, and I love those kind of poems.

I liked what you were trying to portray here too....people do need to open their eyes to the truth and stay gaurded because people are tricky and not everyone is trustworthy. . So many times one human succumbs to the dictatorship of another and their soul becomes destroyed by this person...

Deep write. Loved it :)

Tony,
I fell in love with this from the first two lines, I could see that it was dark yet had a deep meaning and was really important to read and grasp the context because it tells a message and is kinda inspirational while being sad and dark.

Great Work

Wow wow seriously what is this?

I LOVE the use of the metaphors and the image you drew, sooo tpuching. I love how this ended a lesson learned in it, keep your eyes open to life:)
Really awesome piece:)))

Loved it. I agree with Chelsy
This was breathe taking.
Nominated

WOW!!

I loved the poem already just by the title itself! I love the idea and how you played around with it. I see it more like a dark mysterious piece than it is as a sad one.

It gave me this twisted magical feeling while reading it, and I honestly didn't want this poem to end. I wanted more, I wanted it to last longer!

You killed it with this one Tony. A nomination for sure ;)

Reminds me of something Anonymous, the hacker collective might say. i think i get where youre coming from, theres this deep sinister "Puppeteer" feeling going on, tugging a persons strings from inside their soul by building a fake world around them. definitely a good write.

raises some interesting moral questions though.

" Like a disease I found your weakness
and inch by inch I climbed till I
inhabited your entire existence "

My favorite part in this. Tony you are truely brilliant! Your metaphors and imagery capture the readers attention. Beautiful piece ((5))
~Harlea

"Every word captivated your heart
Your insecurities banished;
the truth was right before your eyes
but they were forbidden to see
what was visible to the world"

~When I read this stanza, I immediately related. I felt like it was being said that the truth is/was blatantly obvious to everyone but you. Silver tongued bastards have a way of helping you hear what you want to.~

"Just a string of sentences masked you
from what reality was holding,
In the palm of my hand you sat
ready for me to demoralise your soul
and destroy your faith in humanity."

~It feels like you knew the whole time, how easy it was to talk the talk, knowing that this person was gullible and you could easily sway and destroy them.~

"Like a disease I found your weakness
and inch by inch I climbed till I
inhabited your entire existence -"

~You had every intention of destroying this person, knowing they were weak and seeking someone to take control of them~

"I created a world that wasn't real
just an illusion of what you believed
to be the perfect end,to your fairy tale
I have but one piece of advice
Next time
open your eyes."

~Fully admitting that you played along with the fantasy that this person wanted to believe, her (I'm assuming,) Prince.
The last line almost convinces me that your intention this whole time was to teach her a lesson, punishing her for choosing to believe that love is blind, when it really isn't.

Tony, although this write leaves me with mixed emotions, it's very powerful. The whole poem flowed very well, it was a smooth sadistic story of destroying someone weak. I hate it and I love it at the same time. One your best, in my opinion, of course.

There are many illusionist everywhere. Your poem reminded me of online affairs. Everything is perfect till the truth destroys the fairy tale and people find out that Prince Charming is a toad or that Sleeping Beauty is Snow White's stepmother.Great piece my friend.

I like how you wrote the end. 'Open your eyes' because of 'illusion'. That's very thoughtful.

Amazing poem tony great work! the final words 'open your eyes' made the whole piece full of meaning and powerful thoughts. 5/5

Every word captivated your heart
Your insecurities banished;
the truth was right before your eyes
but they were forbidden to see
what was visible to the world.

- I love the poems you write when the opening is so powerful but then you do not give too much away about what the poem will hold, it is quite mysterious and then we have to read on to find out.

Just a string of sentences masked you
from what reality was holding,
In the palm of my hand you sat
ready for me to demoralise your soul
and destroy your faith in humanity.

- such strong wording here, nice use of the word demoralise, really added impact to your message here.

Like a disease I found your weakness
and inch by inch I climbed till I
inhabited your entire existence -

- so powerful, the power a disease has and it makes you weaker by finding your weaknesses and when we give up it beats us.

I created a world that wasn't real
just an illusion of what you believed
to be the perfect end to your fairy tale,
I have but one piece of advice
Next time
open your eyes.

- excellent ending, I love it. This made me think of a few things actually, about people who choose to see what they only want to see and not what is infront them, they ignore that. Really creative idea T, you pulled this off as always.

Okay, The title fits the content pretty well, IT tells the reader that this will be about someone deceiving the eye of someone.

Which is pretty much what this poem is about.. The illusionist is telling this to the one that was deceived.

It's telling how his/her heart was easily deceived by words, and that her eyes couldn't see the truth, so her heart was easily deceived by an illusion.

But in reality the one deceived was this person via words and via his/her eyes.

The illusionist is telling this person everything, step by step of how things happened, just to see if the persona finally opens his/her eyes.

The advice towards the end was not expected, and that's what added power to this piece. Becuase an illusionist never reveals their magic.. And well, technically this illusionist didn't reveal it but he/she did tell what he/she did.

My suggestion for future poems is to try to not include too many You's and your's because it can turn repetitive and when reading the you's and yours sound too much specially in the first stanza... other than that, this was a good piece.

I love the title and the idea.

5/5

I just loved this sorrowful piece... your emotions were felt with every word and the thought, the idea of this piece is so mature and written by a heartbroken individual. And it has great depth... Good work:)

"the truth was right before your eyes
but they were forbidden to see
what was visible to the world."

This is my favorite line. Compared to the rest of the poem, it really sets things up.
The whole "forbidden" part plays into the fact that it is just an illusion. And then your later use of "fairy tale" is just... superb. It is a dark poem, which is one of my favorite subjects and it has this really eerie feel to it. Good, good.

Wow Tony

I was all set to give you a nice big comment, but the girls have done a great job.

this is the best poem I have read of yours

and because of that

I shall use my final nomination

awesome

really tight, great flow, great imagery and the emotion almost runs off the screen.

You are seriously an amazing writer. I wsh I was just half as talented as you are. I loved this, and I hope you never stop writing

You are seriously an amazing writer. I wsh I was just half as talented as you are. I loved this, and I hope you never stop writing

I think this is one of your best, Tony.
People can definitely be illusionist, they can make us believe every word they say... we are blind to who they truly are.

I love the ending, all we need to do is open our eyes and we will see clearly.

Great write! Adding to my favs!