Comments : Oneness
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11 years ago
by Karla
Lovely piece.
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11 years ago
by Darren
Surely this is not a Randy East poem it is only 9 lines long!!!
the rhyming is great and unforced as always, this has a great message contained and is really compact.
great write.-
11 years ago
by East Poetry
On the contrary...lol
this is actually the tail end to the poem I wrote called "Heavenly parents" .. ha ha
I just thought it made a great small piece on it's own.
Of course "Heavenly Parents" is another long one.
give it a read if you would.
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11 years ago
by LostWords
This is great, such a sweet topic! I loved it.
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11 years ago
by Amreen
Great one. The emotions are vivid despite the length. Love it:)
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11 years ago
I like the different types of rhyming in your poem, both at ends of phrases and inside the phrases like "pure" with "endure" and "it wasn't" with "it wouldn't" and "no decay" with "no array". These types of rhyming are most adorable by readers. The ending of poem is superior with the word "eternity".
^^^
Overall:
Randy you have penned a short poem extracted from your experience and proved that you are a highly talented expert. Thank you for sharing that with us. -
11 years ago
As always very diverse unified words, deep, yet above many
I need to visit here more often -
11 years ago
by Rusheena
A few lines that speaks volumes! Great job!
