Comments : Oneness

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    Lovely piece.

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Surely this is not a Randy East poem it is only 9 lines long!!!

    the rhyming is great and unforced as always, this has a great message contained and is really compact.

    great write.

    • 12 years ago

      by East Poetry

      On the contrary...lol

      this is actually the tail end to the poem I wrote called "Heavenly parents" .. ha ha

      I just thought it made a great small piece on it's own.

      Of course "Heavenly Parents" is another long one.
      give it a read if you would.

  • 12 years ago

    by LostWords

    This is great, such a sweet topic! I loved it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    Great one. The emotions are vivid despite the length. Love it:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    I like the different types of rhyming in your poem, both at ends of phrases and inside the phrases like "pure" with "endure" and "it wasn't" with "it wouldn't" and "no decay" with "no array". These types of rhyming are most adorable by readers. The ending of poem is superior with the word "eternity".

    ^^^
    Overall:
    Randy you have penned a short poem extracted from your experience and proved that you are a highly talented expert. Thank you for sharing that with us.

  • 12 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    As always very diverse unified words, deep, yet above many

    I need to visit here more often

  • 12 years ago

    by Rusheena

    A few lines that speaks volumes! Great job!