Comments : Little Sister

  • 11 years ago

    by Gabriel

    Though simple, I really like it, it has a very bright perspective on things.

    • 11 years ago

      by Biancas Veil

      Thank you
      its For one of the brightest lights in the darkness that is my life. She always makes me smile :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Kips2.0

    A cute poem for your sister.

    But then I would advise you to try breaking the long lines up. You can easily turn this into a free verse and with that it would make your work, neat, concise and easy to read.

    Good message though. Keep writing!